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Sentence Structure Example: James Baldwin

Reading, you can come to appreciate sentences such as the following by James Baldwin.
If we--and now I mean the relatively conscious whites and the relatively conscious blacks, who must, like lovers, insist on, or create, the consciousness of the others--do not falter in our duty now, we may be able, handful that we are, to end the racial nightmare, and achieve our country, and change the history of the world.        
The Fire Next Time, 1963
Baldwin takes a relatively simple thought

If we …do not falter in our duty …, we may be able… to end the racial nightmare.

He then gracefully inserts elements and constructs sequences of elements to extend the depth and clarity of the thought.  Some of that complexity can be suggested by breaking the sentence into units variously indented on the page:

If we
--and now I mean                    the relatively conscious whites                    and the relatively conscious blacks,                            who must,                                 like lovers,                            insist on,                            or create,                            the consciousness of the others--      do not falter in our duty now, we      may be able,             handful that we are,      to end the racial nightmare,      and achieve our country,      and change the history of the world.
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